Here's the back cover blurb, written in the author's own words: A young boy named Jack leaves his hometown in California and travels to Minnesota by himself, without a car. Can he survive on his own, and make it to his destination without starving? Will his mom ever stop fainting?
We can all take a lesson from that blurb. It's short, yet informs us about character, genre, conflict, and tone. It's perfect! But you want to hear the funny sentence. It comes at a point in the story where young Jack has been working odd jobs to make a little money. He gets hired by some kind homeowners to mow their lawn. He likes some parts of the work, and not other parts. Ready? Here's my favorite sentence:
"Some of the things he didn't like were that they paid by quality of work and Jack was not good at quality."
This young author has so much natural talent, it was a pleasure to coach him with his story. He has tons to learn, of course, but he's already developed voice and tone, two aspects of writing that are nearly impossible to teach. He has an ear for language and story, as most of my young writers do, which is why their writing is so incredibly engaging!
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